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lisalatourette
Lisa LaTourette
United States

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love note

under the spring trees unseasonable dripping heat
buildings & sidewalks warbling,
off where the sidewalk meets
sharp sticks of dead grass casting shadows
on a dull & dirty alley
are ripped-up bits of paper, printed on neatly
with a curled & dainty script,
fragmented words once held feelings ruptured, pierced,
someone compelled to undo their own truth
anger stains on the pages,
heat gathers at my knees as I bend to
enfold the torn words in my hands...

then thinking better of it, I open my fingers,
give them back to the wind.

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abitosunshine Comment by: abitosunshine - 2007-07-01 16:18
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A wee bit o' line length structure & a bit o' punctuation editing & I think you've got a real winner here! As for Roy's comment, I must agree & take it a step further, the daydreamin' feelin's better than the real thing!
Smurff Comment by: Smurff - 2007-04-28 08:44
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I enjoyed reading this.
RZelbecq Comment by: RZelbecq - 2007-04-14 13:29
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'Give them back to the wind', nicely.
DickGentile Comment by: DickGentile - 2007-02-21 17:25
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I am there.
Comment by: - 2007-02-14 10:18
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i enjoyed this ;)


...great job!
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