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Desiring perfection takes me out
Of perfection
I don't see the perfection
That's already there because I'm
Looking for something else
Something mind made
An idea about perfection
Defined a certain way
Criteria to be met
August 2, 2007
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I like how this one starts; it reminded me a little of myself. I love the repetition of "perfection" throughout the piece, but I think you may lose some readers in the last line. The contrasting sounds of words like "perfection" and "Criteria" is a little jarring after the near perfect flow of the preceding lines.
All-in-all a good piece!
