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chelly bean
rachel jessee
United States, Michigan, Ypsilanti

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Heart on my sleeve

Your words are like hiccups, they make me feel drowsy.

I keep them on record for when I need sleep.

Your mind's like an anchor, where, when I feel lousy

I can take in the decor, it makes me feel deep.

I tear back the covers for morning to hit me

The blinds pulled back blind me with light.

My bedroom still echoes the sound of a lover

And memories made through the night.

My horoscope said, "You'd be better off dead"

But I don't live according to plan.

If the life that I've led had been lived in my head

My heart would've spilled through my hands.

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vickihowery Comment by: vickihowery - 2007-10-26 10:28
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I love this write !! Great images here and I thought the rhythm worked. Well done !
kjstevens Comment by: kjstevens - 2007-08-12 08:56
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Nice write...indeed, this is living with heart on the sleeve. Great lines..."Your words are like hiccups" and "My heart would've spilled through my hands."
matt1 Comment by: matt1 - 2007-08-07 04:56
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This is really good. I just have a few reservations about the rhythm. I read it out loud and "The blinds . . ." and "And memories . . . " lines don't quite stay in beat.
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