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get over yourself
adding bravado to
something ment to be simple
posturing yourself to prove something
you're not even sure you believe
the flourish and flowers
used so liberally
destroy the soul of what you protest
but nothing stops you from
your sentimental
vomit
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Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-02 06:11
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| Sentimental vomit, like it. A complete, no holds barred take on how disappointing men can be. Truth in abundance. |
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| I think I know know at whom this is aimed, and ouch, man... |
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It's "meant". Like the past tense of "to mean". Don't say "meaned" tho. It isn't funny enough.
Hmmm... pardon my play here. This is a hard-hitting poem, driving at the poseur. A personal stripping-bare. Tough language, too.
Highly descriptive, but not edifying because it would surely polarize the one to whom it is addressed: you.
It reads well. It is strong.
I am glad it is not aimed at me, altho' as reader, I could be 'you'. |
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well,this http://www.editred.com/Uploads/st_56416_un_extraordinary
should give u some relation |
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