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The oldest trick - Karens Challenge
'Name?'
'Derek Edward Allen Davies.'
'And you're applying for'¦?'
'Money, fame and y'know'¦'
'Sensual Delight?'
'S'pose so.'
'Right Mr Davies, signing this contract confirms you've read our terms and conditions.'
'I don't read well.'
'It's our standard contract.'
'O.K. Sign just here?
'Just there.'
'Congratulations, you've just bought yourself a new lifestyle.'
Satan smiled.
One soul - sold as seen.
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Very amusing, sneaking that name joke in there. I did think that this exchange
"Sign just here?
â??Just there.â??"
could have been one line and thus given you some more words with which to play. |
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| I loved the way this read as if it was a job interview. "Mr Satan will see you now." You created a very well drawn character in Derek in such a limited number of words. It was great. |
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Comment by: gmarco - 2007-08-11 01:17
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Oh Derek Edward Allen Davies, he must not have been much of a language guy!
'Just there.â??
â??Congratulations, youâ??ve just bought yourself a new lifestyle.â??
-seems like these two lines should be together, unless I am mistaken and Satan isn't saying both of them.
Good job on this one.
-Garrett |
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| Why can't one just get a nice life style without getting Satan involved! Great read! |
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Comment by: Teri - 2007-08-09 13:52
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Hahahaha. Love the initials. I got a little confused with the 'Just there.' and 'Congratulations ...'
I read that as being said by Satan, so shouldn't they be on the same line? Sorry. I may need a nap.
Thanks for the story, Barry. Another great job.
Teri xo |
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