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jbachand
Jason Bachand
United States, CT, Ashford

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L'Americain

L'Americain

I watch him across a mahogany moor
In a little café where the ambiance is the bouillabaisse.

As I watch him order breakfast
Café, s'il vous plaît'
I know it's black, and no sugar.
I imagine his pale American father made him,
With precise words
Into an appropriate emotional distance.

I picture my life as it would be
if I were in his space.
I'd look at the city from a luxury apartment
and scoop in fistfuls of domestic exhaust.
I'd shake the grief from my farmer's back,
I'd shake the dregs from my grape stained shoes.
My eyes would be suburban pools
My brow unburdened, a flat screen TV;
Living unspecific and clean.
And I'd wring the honesty from my toiled fingers.

On the way out, I shake his hand--it's like a lion's tongue--
J'aime votre patrie I say, and leave.

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lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-17 14:18
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I enjoyed the contrast between the city bred American being watched and the farmer 'shaking grief from my farmer's back'--I like the image of the grape stained shoes.

In my opinion, the farmer doesn't know he has it better. At least he doesn't have to 'scoop in fistfuls of domestic exhaust'. What isn't written is between the lines--the clean air of the countryside and the farmer that doesn't appreciate it because to him the grass is greener in the city--how wrong he is. This seems to be a sorry story repeating itself around the globe in far to many places as farmers flee to cities and become dependent on super markets instead of growing their own food and food for others. When they are all siting in luxury aparments breating exahust, who will feed them all? The robots? The cybergs? Maybe my opinion that I think the grass is greener on the farm is because I grew up in a city. Well done!
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