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LocustsCoatRack
Brent Appling
United States, South Carolina, Columbia

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Haunt at the Ready

These words
are all slanted,
but I can't help it,
my hands were produced a tad
askew.

I've substituted all
sincerity
with another ghost
emotion, floating along
my synapses, cocked to
haunt at the ready.

Now everything
is dry, sometimes even
dusty; the saturation resulting from
monsoons of
'thought balloons'�
is non-existent.

I can feel the descendants of
my past desires, self-weaning on the
dust parasites of the breezy desert,
gratefully providing false hope.

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languidluna Comment by: languidluna Online- 2008-07-08 11:22
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you have a bit of internal rhyme here and there (which i appreciate, it's more difficult to do subtly, or at all) I enjoy trading in sincerity for "other ghosts".
ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-25 03:05
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Excellent rhythm and your word selection provides such an unusual perspective. I don't usually think of hands as slightly askew. And I can clearly see monsoons of thought balloons in my head.
Nice read. I liked it.
Chowrunnergo Comment by: Chowrunnergo - 2007-08-16 04:41
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Monsoons of "thought balloons"-really unique word usage!
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