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grenx1
Glenn DeLuca
United States, MA, Malden

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obscure and lunatic

Darkness Falls on an ever cliche`d melancholia and an author who discovers trouble trying to use the proper mechanics.

"It's hard to see out here," he says, shielding his eyes from the incessant glare of the moon.

"Are you sure it's okay to use this guy's pool?" were the last words he'd uttered before slipping into the deep end, discovering his lack of buoyancy too late and plunging beneath the surface of murky chlorinated soup, causing leaves and algae to roil ominously about the bubbles of his breath as it escaped without him.

"This work will never be finished, will it?" you asked as his taillights faded and the celluloid started to melt.

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ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-29 16:58
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This is an interesting read. I particuarly like the imagery in the third paragraph, and its final image 'his breath escaped without him'. Clear and disturbing.
Nicely done.
MysticSeamaiden Comment by: MysticSeamaiden - 2007-08-20 06:07
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I can see the obscure, but hard to see the
lunacy unless you are using that term meaning reckless. All in all a good job
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