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jahanwisingh
jahanwi singh
India, New Delhi, New Delhi

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mirage

With dreams soaring and heart vacillating
I set off in the desert unending
Solitary, very solitary
I went chasing the fairer dream
Stealthily I lead, without giving whispers to ears
Days went on, only sand, no bed to rest on
The longing grew for the plain, fairest dream.
The sun was scorching, earth baked.

Winds lashed against me
Then too I moved in pursuit of the dream,
Finally thirst beat me, throat choked
I started vandalizing for water.
Tormented by thirst and dreams,
I moved even then.
I moved up a sand dune.

When I reached the summit
Dazzling water saw me
A hope flashed-
Clenching my tears and sweat,
Incessantly I walked and jumped into the water,

But alas! I fell on blue sand
I realized an illusion, a mere mirage
Blank, frozen, cheated, I turned back,
I crawled back, thought-
I would get the resurrected dreams someday.
But the dreams and water are waiting
Somewhere behind the mirage
I didn't see them then,
The mirage lived for ever.

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manoj Comment by: manoj - 2007-10-21 20:43
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lovely poem with great imagery....
Kav Comment by: Kav Online- 2007-10-17 04:54
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Excellent choice of words and vivid imagery in this poem- I really was drawn in. Thanks for the read
simowierdo Comment by: simowierdo - 2007-10-11 12:56
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i really liked your choice of words here. " vandalizing" "Incessantly " it makes the poem extremely visual and that's really good. is for ever supposed to be for ever or is it forever? i liked this because it was very easy to visualize and to relate to :)
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-09-27 23:47
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nice poem . The imagery is very good in your piece and you portray the mirage very well

Anne
sita Comment by: sita - 2007-09-13 02:03
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Enjoyed the read.
There is 'Then too' in the second stanza and again you go 'even then'. I think different words would be better.
The last lines are quite insightful.
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