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kellysmith
Kelly Smith
United Kingdom, Cambridge

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Nightlight

Child of mine laying

lateslumbered in arms,

cradle-comforted

and milk laden.

Eyelids flutter their

way to morning and

breath

falls

on

skin

faintly as bricks of

lamplight, returned from

empty bitter-sweet

streets, glow like bank

bullion or building

blocks cast in bronze.

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Matthew Eduard Abuelo Comment by: Matthew Eduard Abuelo - 2008-05-04 16:59
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Wonderful piece.
thelonelyguy Comment by: thelonelyguy - 2008-01-23 23:27
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I love the spacing and the pacing (forgive the rhyming)
broken up nicely by
breath

falls

on

skin...

lovely!
BrianNew Comment by: BrianNew - 2007-11-29 14:00
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Bullion. The word that most stood out.

Strange sense of the weightless and the heavy.
Comment by: - 2007-11-26 04:38
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I like this one because it's a little simpler and easier to read than the metaphors, lol. :) Easy the eyes.
Comment by: - 2007-11-26 04:35
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I really like this one because it's a little simpler than reading the metaphors, lol.
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