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She Gets Inside
she becomes unobtrusive
yet still an ever-present pulse
a circulatory response
that falls and fails
and rises up into smoke
a precious high
you reach for her
you can only extend your soul so far
gently, as winds shift, she fades
in and out
this delicate image
blurred on the edges
but the center glows
a radiating heat pushed outwards by
breath and interest
your hunger to see her more clearly
as you peak, she wilts away
more a melting of time
than a true decay
but still her lingering scent
has invaded
your porous being now
drenched and overflowing
with her brief stimulation
has she mixed with your blood
so efficiently that you blush?
or is your heart
obstinately sealed against
such fragile intrusion?
8/15/07
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Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-05 15:57
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'as you peak, she wilts away
more a melting of time
than a true decay'
I totally love this line.
This I know, it is real, lovely poetry. I will save it and come back |
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Comment by: LTAB98 - 2007-11-03 16:05
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| It almost seems your subject is ethereal. Very deep. Nicely descriptive, too! Well Done. |
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| Amanda, this definately has a lot of good description. You made some excellent word choices. --Robert Barlow |
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Comment by: SacredV - 2007-08-23 16:49
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I love your choice of words and am impressed by your creative imagery. I agree with Karjon (Karen),you could see this as two parts of the same person which is actually really cool, but I
can see the romantic side and lust this person has for this woman. Its really good. |
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Comment by: GLWard - 2007-08-19 16:38
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All I can say is that it's just plain beautiful. It touches the heart.
Thanks for sharing. |
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