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markbrown
mark brown
United Kingdom, London

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I Gave You Stones for Your Pockets

Although Cathy steeled herself, disgust hit her as soon as she entered the pub.

Sat around a table, the girls from the unit turned to face her as she crossed the stale carpet.

"Oh my god," said Polly. "It's been seven years. You haven't changed."

You have, thought Cathy, fleshy hugs and chubby arms enveloping her.

Sipping water, she looked from Alison's fatted bosom to Charlotte's horse thigh, the way that Caroline's stomach pushed out her dress like an awning.

In the unit, they'd sat in leggings and sweatshirts, carefully cutting out photographs of models with safety scissors. Pinched faces solemn, arms wrapping around flat bodies like ivy, they'd promised each other they'd never eat again.

As Caroline talked of her children, Cathy saw through layers of fat to them growing inside her, grotesque fullness deforming.

You crease your round faces with pity, she thought, but on weigh-in days, I gave you stones for your pockets. I filled my trainers with meat you spat out, my pillowcase with your food, stuck my fingers down your throats.

"You all look so healthy," Cathy said through gritted teeth, knowing that no matter how superior they felt, only she had kept her promise.

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crazybritt Comment by: crazybritt - 2007-09-10 20:22
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oh, how wonderfully grotesque!! this story speaks such truth without going overboard and its not preachy at all. brilliant!
Comment by: - 2007-08-23 15:37
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Didn't mind that sat wasn't seated, really liked it. Sort of thing I'd like to read and share.
VaughnShepherd Comment by: VaughnShepherd - 2007-08-18 12:19
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I can't get enough of your writing. It's always deliously disturbing, a guilty pleasure to read.
GLWard Comment by: GLWard - 2007-08-18 08:59
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Yes, a very haunting tale. One has to feel sorry for Cathy, still being stuck while her friends have recovered and moved on.

And yes, 'sat' should be 'seated'.

Great job, and thanks for sharing.
Comment by: - 2007-08-18 07:43
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i had to read this several times before i understood why they'd want to seem heavier on weigh in days. the word "unit" was throwing me until i realized it was a treatment facility. at least, i'm assuming it's a treatment facility.

i think "sat" should be "seated."

"Sipping water, she looked from ..."

i love this part. it makes me feel as disgusted by their bodies as cathy is. and "sipping water" is a nice touch because it's all cathy would allow herself. i can see her eyeing them over the rim of the glass.

very good!
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