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rising
If the water serenades me.
Will these branches be enough,
to keep me floating?
Though, they are crippled and worn.
It seems you climb fences,
with a charming ease
Do you have plans
for the aftermath,
of a rusty god beginning to dream
If this water wakes me
will there be new birds,
to break me from slumber.
To keep me above, to keep me
within seams.
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Comment by: mafsa - 2007-08-24 02:59
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-Haunting and very pretty-
>true, it's soulful.
-Do you have plans
-for the aftermath,
-of a rusty god beginning to dream-
>my fave lines
thanks for sharing, i think i saw a bit of paradise for a bit...
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Comment by: Murf Online- 2007-08-21 19:18
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| I love the line "of a rusty god beginning to dream." Somehow I feel a connection to it. |
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| thanks very much. I thought the same thing, that it was long. I think I just used longer sentences than usual. |
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| Haunting and very pretty. It seems long but it's really not, I think you captured the feeling really well. |
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