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Initially
Candor is overrated.
A slumped body in a worn
seat can do the trick too.
Sparkling eyes laden with
equally sparkling emotion are
not necessary. A lazy glance
every five minutes or so will suffice.
I want expectant conversation
that shimmers with connections,
that buzzes like the vibrations
of crystal stems meeting during a toast.
A topical response, albeit
about you again, at least means
you are here with me'right?
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I saw this piece as a contemplation of why people settle for less than they really deserve in relationships.
"A topical response, albeit
about you again, at least means
you are here with me'�right?"
This particular stanza reminded me of how some will stay in superficial relationships just so they are not alone. It's an interesting topic and I enjoyed your delivery. |
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Yes quite, a dull evening with the all too familiar, beloved,
a splendid dinner party, very scintillating |
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| i love it. love your play on words nice job |
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"that buzzes like the vibrations
of crystal stems meeting during a toast."
Fresh.
Made me think, I relate, relationships are like beautiful, fragile glasses.
Thank you.
~
Seth |
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| Love the opening stanza. I like what you are getting at with the ending question - does this really count as 'being with' someone?- but I don't t hink that stanza is as tight as the rest of the poem. |
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