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TequilaTwilight
Mercedes Dawson
United Kingdom, Manchester

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Like The Cutting of Hair

Many moons ago, in times past, once upon a time'¦
Nothing can romance the past to my presence.
Past is past and my sell by date expired in your leaving.

You walked away from me like another self,
as though we split, amoeba'd, and you became a whole
from my half, left without breadcrumbs or a yellow
brick road to guide me.

I stood with my feet paved to the spot, unable to take
those steps back, to re-trace, to figure our parting.
Paths split so palms would ever cross, never read right.

Maps were lines of foreign exchange that I just
could not understand the currency of, and no weight
in gold paid for the piper to lure you back again,
only others who couldn't guess my name.

Perhaps there was a reason, a story you had to follow
that I was uninvited from, and afraid you would leave
me on the step, an unwanted slipper, you went alone.

I search the pages but find no truth from the fables,
no legend to be caught in fact for us, and the moment
of pricking the needle struck so hard I knew I never
awoke, but stayed a sleeper.

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Comment by: - 2007-10-07 23:18
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"You walked away from me like another self,
as though we split, amoeba'd, and you became a whole
from my half, left without breadcrumbs or a yellow
brick road to guide me."

i absolutely love this image...its like, somehow, good poets know how to draw from their own personal experiences something that many others can relate to...well in this particular poem of yours, that yellow brick road line is that moment for me...
Kerosene Comment by: Kerosene - 2007-09-25 09:43
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You use some great analogies in this piece. The bread crumbs and yellow brick road are used perfectly.

Thanks for sharing this,

john
brigitteliebenbe Comment by: brigitteliebenbe - 2007-09-15 02:43
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I also see the 'fairy-tale' element - the last 2 lines - but in this case Sleeping Beauty is not be woken by true loves kiss! If this is from experience, then I hope you have found someone who can really appreciate the emotion and creativity of you.
rachelle11 Comment by: rachelle11 - 2007-08-26 21:02
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i know exactly how you feel... how sad that i always feel drawn to men that don't want the same as i do. but whateva live and learn;)
gr8 writes!
Comment by: - 2007-08-24 06:44
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honestly, spelling doesn't matter to editors if the content is what they are looking for, and if you want to get published, know what the editor is looking for and do the best you can to make the content more brilliant than the pulchritudinous morning sun in a warm winter's eve.
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