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Strangers we should remain
strangers we were
then why this short lived heaven
I often asked
I will soon die
die from the world of glitters
I never preferred to be in the light.
Unsung, unrevealed and uncared
Liked it that way
Infinite unsatisfied dreams
silent screams
Have weakend u
I watched
silently�
dazed and confused
How innocent is innocence�when sex calls?
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well thankx i lot
by the line-
Unsung, unrevealed and uncaredâ??-Liked it that way " the poem says-
the poet likes to be away from the light...u must understand the fine philosophy here that he prefers to be unsang,uncared and unrevealed than to be sung,cared and revealed(i.e in light)
intriguing poem here mate - defo one to re-read and find more depth than at first reading.
"I never preferred to be in the light.â??Unsung, unrevealed and uncaredâ??-
Liked it that wayâ?¦" - i like this line but find it a little misleading as the first part directs the reader to knowing you were away from the light (so to speak) and then the second implies you were in it and liked it. i know that's not the case but the structure of the sentance "never preferred" and then "liked it that way" seems a little confusing to me. BUT that may just be me not making sense of myself! :o)
your language is well chosen, i love the last line. I get the feeling i'm becoming a fan! :o) x
I really love the first stanza of this poem... then again I like it all but the first stanza really grabs me. Loves it :) I also really like the way that the poem is kind of ambiguous in that its talking to someone yet in a way where its almost like thinking aloud. It gives it a very dreamy yet realistic quality
