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eternaloptimist
Gina K
United States, Texas, Mesquite

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From one eternity to the next

Love me?

Yes

From one eternity to the next

Yes, just squeeze the trigger.


My life was a haze of laughter and pure emotion.

Before it turned into a haze of bullet shards.

My life was a love story

Before it turned into a gun shot milieu


He loved me and I loved him

We overcame many obstacles too strong for most

Days of separation

I found love in the warmth of another

He found love in a chilled can


And yet, here we are

As in love as that first day of summer

When we sat together till dusk

And promised one another infinity

Hand in hand.


We were anything and everything but weak

Nothing could hold us back in our youthful ignorance

When he laughed I laughed, for years

And when there were tears, it seemed to never end.


We reached a middle area, becoming softer and slower

I could not live as fast as my spirit desired

One day we were immortal

The next, scheduling Botox like the rest of America


We loved each other too much to let this happen

To grow old is to grow weak

We made a vow to meet in the next facet of forever

Before this life had a chance to break the beauty of everything we had.


Our last embrace felt odd

Two bodies intertwined, yet cold.

Afterward we faced each other and raised our guns

And one explosion later I met the next eternity

Alone.


Turns out we were not as strong as I thought

Forgiveness was not a part of this man.

For when I found my love elsewhere

He lost all feeling

Kind of like a bullet embedded in your chest

You lose all feeling.


Before my metal was delivered

Somewhere in that horrid, icy cold

There was a flash of that warm summer day

And I felt my hand in his, and we stayed like that

Till I was more alone than Ive ever been.

He promised me forever

But forever was shorter than I had anticipated.



My life was a love story.

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happygaara Comment by: happygaara - 2008-01-24 07:25
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:) ususally I don't have enough patience to read poetry, but I loved the first line and then I loved the next and the next... and I actually read it and enjoyed it! I usually don't do that!
eternaloptimist Comment by: eternaloptimist - 2007-08-26 19:12
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Thank you for your input and suggestions, it means a lot =)
seancolledge Comment by: seancolledge - 2007-08-26 05:28
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Your use of words is interesting in places but it can be difficult at times to comprehend exactly what the emotions portrayed are as you almost try and overwhelm the reader with the imagery used.

However, I did enjoy reading it and it finishes quite sadly.

Nice job
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2007-08-26 03:41
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forever was shorter than I had anticipated

that's kind of janis joplin
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2007-08-26 03:40
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OH!!!!!!!!!
if i liked poetry
i would love this
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