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skilbilda
Asha White
United States, IL, Chicago

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Spoken Word, Unspoken

Most days are often spent dreamin and hopin
For some positive thought promotion
To take the spot of these negative notions
That seem to be spoken in the form of complaints
And cruel jokin.
"I wish" and "why can't I have" are often spoken
Unacceptance of the token that is myself
Created to get wealth, promote health, and love self
'Cause without no love of self there can be no love of others
So if there's no meaning behind my words I'm chokin
On too many spoken words, unspoken.
Need to stop letting people provoke and
Learn to control my own remote
Because I don't like what I see when I press rewind
And play back my foolish behind
At times asinine and out of line
Often because I didn't take the time
To think.
Some things are better left unsaid
Don't speak life to what's dead
Or else something that once tormented you
May be resurrected
Then you can't get a peaceful nights rest
And your soul feels neglected
Cause things got so hectic
So you've just accepted
Your situation.
Forgetting that if you got down on your knees
And prayed, God could change the station
Start replacing what's wrong with what's right
But since the words were never spoken
You're sinking quicker than a worm in quicksand
Tryna think of a quick plan
Like you can just stand
Even though you ain't got no backbone
Too many hours have flown by
With you wiping tears from your eyes
And stifling your cries
Because you didn't want them to know why
Couldn't bear to verbalize the thing that's got you hurtin
So your heart continues to bleed
This spoken word, unspoken.
But if you would listen to the signs
Since looks can be deceiving
Maybe you can hear when another too is grieving
And although it's not always easy
You need to be cleaving to the part of you that's broken
If you ignore it you're really not copin
And what becomes of the pieces of you, a precious token
They settle at the bottom, remaining spoken words, unspoken.

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Afrka Comment by: Afrka - 2007-12-01 14:51
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Profound write! Thanks for sharing.
Dundano Comment by: Dundano - 2007-08-26 19:26
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Wow, I really could relate to this poem. It was great the way it flowed and your rhyming was wonderful. The part about God changing the station really hit home. It was obvious that you started with an idea and stuck with it until the end. Great job!
conordalton Comment by: conordalton - 2007-08-26 15:29
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I like this a lot. It reminds me of many issues I go through and write about as well.

I also like the writing style and rhyme. Even though there were no line breaks, when i read through it a second time I noticed the short lines like, "To think" and "Your situation." I don't know if you meant it to be that way, but i kind of took it as a pause, and think it was a good place for them. Like, "Heres the important part!"

You touched on a lot of things and spoke true words on each. Keep it up!

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skilbilda Comment by: skilbilda - 2007-08-26 14:17
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Thank you. You know I thought about having a few more breaks--just wasn't sure exactly where I wanted to put them. It's something I'll definitely look into. Also, the "Cause" is actually supposed to have an apostrophe, I'll have to edit it. Again, thanks for your feedback!
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2007-08-26 14:11
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Lovely imagery - and I could hear 'you' reading it in the rhythm of the words (even though I don't know what your voice sounds like...).

I know this is meant to be all spoken in one go, but a few breaks would make it easier to read on the page/screen, if it wouldn't go against your sensibilities.

I only stumbled when you used 'Cause' at the start of a couple of lines - an apstrophe at the start of the word would make it clear it's short for because.

So many amazing ideas and images crammed in here - I loved it.
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