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zambr000
Mario Zambrano
United States, NY, Brooklyn

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Stop Clapping George

I might sleep better if I wash it, my pillow, it smells of dirty hair. Downey will likely lull me to sleep. Tomorrow though.

I check the clock and it's two thirty-six. I've been in bed for two and half hours. Sleep mode on the radio has already turned-off. I could reset it, listen to pop music on volume number three. But nah.

I can't sleep. George can't sleep.

He splashes the water in his bowl trying to get my attention, but I'm not going to switch the light on. Not this time. He knows I usually do, but not this time.

He continues to splash, clapping water and clapping his fins against the glass to keep me awake. If I don't switch the light on, he won't feel as though he triumphed; he won't stop clapping. He won't let me sleep. But my betta fish has to learn. George has to stop clapping water.


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In the morning I notice. George drowned while I was sleeping.

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Chowrunnergo Comment by: Chowrunnergo - 2007-08-28 04:55
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The last line makes the story. Random and hilarious.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2007-08-27 09:15
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I liked this, even if it wasn't 'our' George.

I had no idea at first George was a fish. You know, Mario, you could expand on this a little more. I like it as it is, but I really think it would work well as a longer piece of flash. As always, the writing is wonderful.

If you want to read the other stories [the original ones], the links are in the topic in the opening post. No obligation, but I'd love to see where you could take the womanizing George.

Thanks for the great read, Mario, and I'm so glad you're joining in the challenges. [Do more.]

Teri xo
zambr000 Comment by: zambr000 - 2007-08-27 06:37
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ahh shucks - did I totally miss the challenge?
Is there some other George Teri was referring to?
aahhhhh- so like me :(

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mafsa Comment by: mafsa - 2007-08-27 06:12
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ah, george isn't the human womanizer who has a dumb mistress, but a fish!
nice work though, and congrats on winning drew's approval!
mary;>
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