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am not going
I am not going.
no ,
I am not going for the show.
I am not growing
i am not growing anymore.
facing a circular flow and i am kind of
low ?
steamed brains,smashed tissues and smoked eyes
red air,blue grass and green skies
fucking the earth now
and then..beyond lows and highs
restless?
naah
I am not going,i am not going for the show.
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| Very melancholic & and odd. I like it. |
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Comment by: mafsa - 2007-10-12 00:33
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very thoughtful, i like your style here.
steamed brains,smashed tissues and smoked eyes/ red air,blue grass and green skies
>favorite lines, especially the use of colors here.
thanks for the cool read. Mary:p |
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| thankx val |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2007-09-09 15:35
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I like this poem, but I feel it would profit somewhat with another format. I would consider possibly removing the dots, end line periods, question marks, and the exclamation point. I like, very much, how you ended it.
Cheers! |
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| very interesting. i enjoy how blunt this piece is. honest and pretty. thanks for sharing:) |
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