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Puzzle
Forgive me
as I study every movement
and analyze every sentence.
After weeks and months,
your name still melts like honey
on my tongue, and your mystery
remains unsolved.
There's so much to consider,
from the subtle tilt in
your grasp on a coffee mug,
to the mischievous stars
sparkling in your eyes at night.
All I know, all I understand
is that neither of us cast this spell,
and neither of us
are complete on our own.
So, please, let me
find all your pieces '
all your strengths and weaknesses,
all your aspirations and idiosyncrasies.
Because all I long to do now
is learn who you are '
and who I may be.
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Comment by: Aria - 2008-05-23 13:02
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This is so very pretty. I don't think I have any critiques. I loved "and your mystery remains unsolved." and "neither of us cast this spell,
and neither of us are complete on our own" These are beautiful words from someone very desperately and purely in love. I loved the whole thing, but the lines from " All I know" to the end are the best. It was weird for me to read words like idiosyncrasies and aspirations only because I am so used to using words with a different sound but same meaning. But, it works in this. Lovely work. |
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| I love this poem the tone and emotion flows very well together. thanks for charing this poem. look forward on reading more from you. |
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| Wow, thanks, hun! I'm glad you liked it so much. :) |
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| I am absolutely head over heels in love with this piece. There's so much emotion behind it, and I can identify, as I'm sure many people can. No criticism, it's wonderful. |
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