Angie Dotson
United States, TX, Carrollton

Words:	134
Access:	Public
Comments:	5

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Promises Made

I promise'�
I'll love you forever!
I promise'�
I'll be here for you!
I promise'�
we'll be together!
I promise'�
I'll do what you need me to!

I promise'�
I'll be faithful!
I promise'�
I'll change my ways!
I promise'�
I'll marry you!
I promise'�
I'll be with you every day!

I promise'�
I'll control my temper!
I promise'�
I'll be good to your kids!
I promise'�
I'll stop hitting you!
I promise'�
I won't do what I did!

I promise'�
I won't do it again'�
I promise'�
I won't do it again'�
I promise'�
I won't do it again'�
I promise'�
I won't do it again'�

I promise'�
I won't LET you do it again...

July 2007

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Comment by: Scribe - 2008-08-26 07:29

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Nice rhythm to this. A cadence of sorts. Comes full circle.

Comment by: dannykurl - 2008-03-14 11:49

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'seeing the light' is such a liberating thing

well done

Comment by: Murf Online- 2007-09-04 22:04

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I always enjoy the repetitive stuff. Feels like you getting in pounded into you head.

Comment by: faeriewhisper - 2007-09-04 15:31

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yea definitely too many "i promise" there, but it's all good. a therapy session :)

faerie blessings...

Comment by: - 2007-09-04 14:57

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Too many 'I won't do it agains', I think... But I liked the ending. The little surprise.

But...You started to rhyme, then didn't after a point. I think if you can rhyme all the way through it, then it'll be a little more impressive.

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