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OK, I think I got prostitutes. And maybe sweatshops?? But whose are the headless bodies in whose shadows they dress?
Am I anywhere near?
This is so strong, Zayra, with so many sharp images. I read the whole thing aloud, and it just reeled off the tongue - fantastic writing. |
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| I didn't get all the allusions here, but I loved the way this rolled out and didn't stop for anybody, least of all me! |
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Comment by: frani - 2007-09-05 09:06
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| Great piece of work. Deep-set imagery and great metaphorical use throughout. Well done :) |
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Comment by: jjsmith - 2007-09-05 03:29
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OH!!!!!!!!!!!!
dylan meets jagger |
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Now this is sharp. It reads well. I just reread and it unfolded further. I think I will read it a third time.
What do you think of George Bush?
The clothing metaphor works well.
What would I criticize? This is keen as is. |
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