SING THE TIME OF LAMENT
Sing, O ye sweetest of voices,
sing, O ye whose heart still hopes,
for the Right Whale.
Sing, O ye children,
sing, O ye loving parents of children,
for the passing of the Great Trees.
Play the slow drums
and the low guitars
for the ruins of the Rain Forests.
Chant in unison, O ye who yet possess heart,
cry in music, O ye who have seen Love's passing
for the hunted Mourning Dove'¦
...the absent Carrier Pigeon,
the Holy White Bear,
and the great sleeping glaciers,
and all things of Monumental Life
whose misfortune it is
to be larger in the flesh
than a man.
Where is there a casket
fit for a river?
A headstone for a mountain?
Sing long and sing in the dark harmony
O ye singers of Lament
all ye whose conscience cries out
for the great destruction we have wrought.
Ah ... this is the age of lamentation
when before our tearful eyes
cities will fall and grow silent,
our bones lie beside a shard
of buried pottery, and the music
of our voices be lost
with the echoes.
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Comment by: sarra - 2007-11-03 18:51
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Bravo!!!!! I stand and applaud. I think the moment this all "sank in'' and really spoke loudly to me was when I read these two lines:
Where is there a casket
fit for a river?
A headstone for a mountain?
That speaks loudly and reverbs in my mind.
Another excellently written piece.
You, my friend, have an amazing talent for the written word. |
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| Oh, I do think you ought to keep 'Holy White Bear' and 'sleeping glaciers'... |
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From what I recall of the original, Parris, I believe this version is a marked improvement, suitably solemn, yet quietly joyful. Maintaining the tone you begin with, using the "ye" address throughout, really ties the poem together.
The one thing that threw me a bit was the term "Monumental Life"--forgive me, but what first popped into my devious brain was an insurance company. Perhaps there is a less evocative descriptor you might choose. It also occurs to me that some more "active" and less abstract descriptors might be chosen for your roster of species (e.g. frolicking whale, or redolent rain forests--poor examples, I know). Just a thought.
Thanks for alerting me to the update, and for giving us such a poignant and picturesque read.
Blessings!
Mark |
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Comment by: sita - 2007-09-12 00:29
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Where is there a casket
Fit for a river?
A headstone for a mountain?
These lines underlined the content and its title.
As mark says, I too think rephrasing the 2nd last stanza would make it fit better with the rest of the poem |
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| Thoughtful and thought provoking. The repitition of the opening Oh ye, reminds me of hymn, which this piece that lists the great losses and tragedies we humans have wrought upon this planet needs. Very powerful, great style. And enough compliments from me, you have enough admirers. |
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