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msnow
Mark Snow
United States, WI, Superior

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Karen's Wee Story Challenge #10-- Second

I'd never come in second before. Ever. This was a first. Could I handle it? Be strong. Don't embarrass yourself by losing it in front of these people.

I can hear the old man's voice now, 'Second, huh?' That's all he'd say, trying to look in my face, his eyes finding his shoes.

My mom? She'd try not to cry, but you could see how important it had been to her too. She'd look away and dab her tears.

The hours I'd put in. The battles, the struggles, all over now.

I'd be eighteen in a week. After that no more competitions. Too old. This was my only shot.

Illiterate at fourteen. Dyslexic at sixteen. Second place in the state spelling bee at seventeen. This was a first. I'd never felt this good in my life.

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Qwilla Comment by: Qwilla - 2007-09-07 12:58
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Great "flip" story!

The build up to the *suposed* conclusin was great. All the same elements that work to describe a loss and a defeat, still work to describe the great gain and the victory.

For some reason the progress of this piece reminds me of fencing, skillful fencing where tiny movements have huge implications.

I am curious: What was the goal/directions of the "wee challenge"?
Koinonia Comment by: Koinonia - 2007-09-06 08:12
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Aww bless. Clever and sweet at the same time! I love it
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