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About bent over, Stella stopped him, "Let me do that." She rubbed muscle cream on his back, ankles, and tied his shoes.
He gulped the shot, tucked his shirt in.
Announced from the stage,"Laughlin's Music Man!"
He winked at Stella, 'See, it's magic.'
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hey rosie
yeah--hahahaha--60 words--it's a killer. i could try though. thanks for the read--i'm sorely behind with reading. but promise i'll make the rounds
very soon. thanks again
t.
Loved this one - especially the ending, which is really strong; I can hear his voice and see that wink!
It starts in the right place, and gives just the right amount of detail along the way.
Only stumbled on one thing: 'About bent over', sounds like Stella, but I assume you meant the music man? If so, this could do with rephrasing (yes, I know - 60 words aren't much to rephrase with).
many thanks guys--appreciate the reads-- oh well yes
combining the two, what? no extra points? hahahaha! oh all right,
thanks for another great challenge karen :)
