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| i love it when words give the feel of colors, the taste of them; fantastic write!...namaste |
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| I found this to be an erotic descriptive poem . Clever wording and excellent flow. |
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| I liked this poem instantly. I can almost taste the orange. One criticism: on the last line "and only a single bite" kind of confuses the reader. I think it would be better to write "in only one single bite" |
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| wow, this really made me want some fruit. so precise with the words. good job! |
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Comment by: Mimozi - 2007-09-07 06:51
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| This is an excellent write. Palpable. The verbs used throughout give it a very sensual feel. |
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