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IF
If you were...
a book
I would read you
from cover to cover
again and again
never tiring
of your story
If you were...
a drink
I would savor your
every sip
drink
every delicious drop
and still thirst for more
If you were...
a star
I would gaze at you
for hour upon hour
night after endless night
ever in awe
at the wonder of you
If you were...
a song
I would sing
each precious note
hum your beautiful melody
until my voice cracked
and still strain
to sing you
If you were...
mine
oh, if you were mine
If
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Comment by: fredav - 2007-09-11 08:26
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| Carrie, Carrie! What a poem.. the longing is just oozing from this piece. Your words embody the emotion so well. Very nice.. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2007-09-11 05:14
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| Another dandy poem, Carrie! Not everybody can go from humor to romance and pull both off, but you sure can. Can't spot a thing I'd change on it. |
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| What a romantic verse! I absolutely felt this one. Thanks for sharing it. |
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Comment by: - 2007-09-10 15:55
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| Critiques are supposed to be helpful, in a critical sort of way, aren't they? I'm not supposed to say 'I like it', but point out ways to improve it. Well, hell, I like it. Good work. |
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| sounds like you got the beginnings of a song on your hands. Beautiful! |
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