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Clock Stop Talk
Clock Stop Talk
some time has passed
since I've tapped letters back,
some time past
since I've wrapped black
on the white screen -
it relieves the building, you see,
the pushing from somewhere
in the stomach or the kidney.
I'll stand opposite then,
in front of the silver glass
(it looks so samely back),
face to pen with malicious intent:
I'll squeeze out imperfection,
delete my dull diction,
remove with conviction
the friction in my face;
I'll fix my hair, rearrange words
here or there, to stop on occasion
for use of punctuation
when my eyes catch my eyes
and stare.
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Comment by: - 2006-03-08 19:08
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| actually...yeah, that's exactly it, only I couldn't ever really articulate just right and you just said it better than I ever could hah. Thanks =P |
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Comment by: - 2006-03-08 19:05
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| Sounds frustrated...as if you are not happy with the words you are writing ..because they do not resemble the voice you want to portray..but..then again..you said this was just a poem on form..so who knows. - Leah |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-09 04:05
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| thanks Dave, and yeah it really wasn't about the content but about the form, sometimes I just like to play around with words and rhythm and whatnot, and that's all I was doing here really. |
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| I really like this, and I'm not sure I can verbalize why. It feels percussive, like a drum solo, or a rap flow. Maybe it's just a good example of sculpting with words. |
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| i am not realy smart and think i dident understand this poem but i was an interesting read that made me think |
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