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markbrown
mark brown
United Kingdom, London

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Blue Boy

The Gloucester is an island.

The boy must have been eighteen, nineteen at most, face sharp, jawbone like a scythe. Barry sets a pint down on the table.

'I've bought you a drink. You new here?'

The boy nods, shrugging deeper into his coat, lights and music bouncing around the near-empty weeknight pub. 'Coupla weeks.'

He looks terrified, Barry thinks, remembering arriving in London himself; the older men grouping around him, some friendly, some not.

He pushes the thought aside.

'You'll soon get to know everyone. You see him over there? Had more cocks than the Oxford boat race.'

The boy laughs. Barry thinks of his sister's kids, smiling bravely after grazed knees. When the boy walks, head down, sagging jeans, thick sweatshirt, Barry remembers the cruel queens laughing at him before he learned to dress.

In the toilet, the boy pisses, heart racing.

'I'm just here for a wee,' Barry says, joining him at the urinals.

When Barry gives him a bar work application form, the boy hugs him tight. Kissing his cheek, Barry wills him to turn his head.

Looking over Barry's shoulder at himself in the mirror, the boy smiles.

Stupid bald old queen, he thinks, elated.

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citydweller Comment by: citydweller - 2007-09-13 08:50
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Busted a gut over "Had more cocks than the Oxford boat race.? Lovely beginning, brilliant ending. Nice rhythm to the description in the second sentence.

Keep up the good work.

~J.
Louise Comment by: Louise Online- 2007-09-11 18:40
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Loved this story - especially the first line. It really emphasises the concept of a separate social clique with its own rules and types of people - a microcosm within society almost (anno I sound up-my-own-arse with that but still). I really admire your ability to create a whole story out of something so concise - loves it in general :)
crazybritt Comment by: crazybritt - 2007-09-10 20:19
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hahaha. love the ending. it contrasts so well with the melancholy tone of the beginning.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2007-09-10 18:06
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Ah, now, see? Learn something new every day. I had no idea, as I said. Like the story even more now. Thanks again.

Teri xo
markbrown Comment by: markbrown - 2007-09-10 18:01
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The Gloucester was a really famous of gay pub in Greenwich in London.

It's now an exceedingly straight pub with the same name.

Greenwich traditionally, being the place where the seat of the British navy was, is a place where people get washed up.

Me included.

Cheers,

Mark
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