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| I know exactly what you mean; I have been there; laying in bed talking to my girlfriend about something really important to me or that is really bothering me and she just roles over and goes to sleep; leaving me there to lay alone going crazy in my head. I relate so much and know exactly what you mean. |
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Lines 1 through 5 are the best I've read of yours so far. Do not be clouded by useless images.
"I lay
next to you
soundlessly sobing
the tears pooling
upon the pillowcase.
Just praying
the better days
will come.
Next to me you lay,
sleeping peacefully,
dreaming of what
god himself only knows." |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-07 11:42
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| Well the whole point of it is, that you want your partner to notice you in agoney but at the same time you don't wana stress or "burden" them w/ your problems. It's definately a double standard. Thanks for all the comments guys |
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| Yes, so close yet so limited. The sparseness of the words gives it more impact I think. |
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| i dont realy agree i dont see the power in this poem it puts me in the place of bieng weak in the fact that i sit there watchin my partner sleep and they dont care how im feeling and then cut off but thanks |
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"There and Back Again"
A powerful, poetic journey back from the brink - literally! The poetry in this book is a direct result of the creative processes started by entering therapy for depression.The poetry speaks for itself and allows others to relate to the content in their own ways.
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