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BradlyScribbles
Bradly Brackenbury
United States, Missouri, Independence

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Song of Surrender

[Male]
Here I stand, before myself, defeated once again
Lackluster life of lying to myself and all my friends
Six candles sit beside my bed, glowing golden, warm and dim
Shut this door and shut you up, you're Never going back for him

[Female]
Please forgive me, for my everything, I cried myself to sleep
Can't stop this ice cold water, and I just can't help but weep
I'm an empty shell of nothingness, I don't know what to think...
I could never let you stay with me, God I don't wanna set you free.

[Male]
The days pass by invisibly, can't seem to find the sun
Keep fighting with my conscience, should I stay, or am I done?
You'd burned a hole in my heart like the barrel of a gun
But nothing's gonna quell this pain now, and you can never run.

[Female]
I just let you fall in love with me... I thought we were okay...
I guess we made some promises we never should've made.
You looked me deep and swore to me that you'd never be afraid
But now you're drowning in this mess and dying from the pain...

[Male]
We were open season victims on the Devil's black roulette
Had all the wrong cards in our hands and placed the largest bet
We offered nothing and took it all, too weak to pay the debt
I find myself just crying... GOD I wish we just.. never met

[Female]
I'm so far from my sanity, defeated by my sins
I've crossed the line so many times, I'll never love again
I'm tired of fighting everyday in a battle I can't win
I'm leaving you forever, and I'm never going back for him.

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Comment by: - 2007-10-11 20:36
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I loved the way this was presented. Male/Female.

The words were so bold and sad. I enjoyed this very much.
cutuparist18 Comment by: cutuparist18 - 2007-09-24 03:13
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i dig the [Male]/[Female] thing. I shall steal it. . . :-P (seriously)
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