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darkpoet1987
Bryant Harland
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United States, MI, Davison

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Is This Goodbye?

I treated you so well!
I ran my fingers against you
through you
caressed you gently in the night
perhaps we never kissed
or danced,
or talked of the future
but
I massaged you in the shower
reaching every part of you with lather.
I never left a single auburn strand dry.
I sacrificed for you
ignoring friends who said those things about you
now you're leaving without a word

friends told me not to worry
that I could cope
I thought of watching a movie,
but then I see so many men with...you know
And here is your visage fading
the follicles of your existence turning away from me.
why do you hold me in contempt?
did I ever wrong you?
did I ever pull you too forcefully?
was it because of her?

So, this is goodbye,
I can see the strands falling away
something that I always knew would happen
before you leave, though
She loves you too
She loves the way she could run her fingers through you
and you would twirl around them as she scratched my scalp.
she loved that I grew you past my shoulders
And how dark you got
after I stood up out of the pool.
she loved to nuzzle against you, knowing
I would take good care of you.
and I loved all of that too!
I know it must be difficult for you, so
take your time.
there is no need to fall away so fast
stay a while
so that when you must go
We may part as old friends

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mercymanic Comment by: mercymanic Online- 2007-09-14 17:41
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*sighs*

Ignore him. We get trolls here too.

Provocatively written. The unique angst of poly heartbreak shines through these words.

The last three lines really cinch it for me. No matter what type of relationship ends, it would be nice if the people involved could "part proudly, as old friends." Sadly too many people can't feel closure unless their partings are messy and abrupt. I hope you find a good home for this poem.
MMerlino Comment by: MMerlino - 2007-09-13 15:51
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maybe she didnt like your writing?
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