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gmarco
Garrett Marco
United States, Oregon, Eugene

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Wee Story #12

The Bracelet:


 


A crowd looked on as she paraded through the street.  Smiles, jeers and cheers, though mostly the latter.  Those who readied her told of the excitement that would be abound in the streets and prepared her for the event, explaining that simply avoiding their eyes would keep them as quiet as possible.


Exhausted, she marched forward heavily, each step a chore.  The throng grew thicker at the street's side as the procession neared her wooden throne.


Steps creaked with eerie volume as she climbed atop the dais, tears no longer held back.  Her guard placed a hand on her white gown'made special for the occasion'a sympathetic gesture that she did not believe true in spirit.


Sitting on the throne her brass bracelets clanked together.  She brought her head up, facing out into the multitudes before her.  An executioner came forward, head draped in black, wielding a heavy axe.


 


 


Before Your Time:


 


'Wait, so you never played Half-Life?'


'No, dude, must have been before my time.  I don't know, I didn't start gaming until I started college.  They had, like, four Xboxes hooked together at the frat house.  It was totally clutch, we played Halo all night.'


'Clutch?  Never mind, dude, you're missing out.  I know the way of the Halo player, yeah, great game, you could totally beat my ass after six Jäger-bombs, whatever, but you can't accept it as the pre-generator of all that is modern gaming just because it was the first thing you encountered.  Yes, it brought the culture into the mainstream, but really that's a strike against it.  That's like saying Harry Potter is the end-all, be-all fantasy novel.'


He looked at me with a slurred sort of eye, slanted in its understanding.  'Dude,' he said, 'Fuck you, I could TOTALLY kick your ass in blood gulch.'


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crystalrose Comment by: crystalrose - 2007-09-18 18:45
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i liked both pieces very much. Thanks for sharing.
GLWard Comment by: GLWard - 2007-09-16 12:14
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Loved the first one. And of course got lost in the second. But it was well written. ONe thing- shouldn't it be 'at [the] frat house'?
gmarco Comment by: gmarco - 2007-09-16 01:58
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Back from time away from the computer!

Ash: More than a hint of mocking in the second piece :)

Grae: Thanks, I think the 'special' works, but I'm not 100% on it. Thanks for the kind words.

Mark: Thanks for the three stooges, so fantastic.

Teri: I wrote the second story knowing full well it was a total in-joke. As for the first story, I think it was a bit of my mind running away with a complex idea that is not for a 150 word count, really I am thinking of doing a short story on it.

As for the sword vs. axe thing, I was going to have a sword at first (history yay) but I had been using swords a lot and thought to change it up a bit... Ok, I'm lying, I just didn't think about it!
mafsa Comment by: mafsa - 2007-09-14 17:13
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great stories, Garrett! but i couldn't quite enjoy the second one because i didn't even know how to counterstrike. i love the first one, though i would like to know the reason behind the execution.

-Her guard placed a hand on her white gown??made special for the occasion
-Sitting on the throne her brass bracelets clanked together.
>made me think of a self-indulgent royalty.

Thumbs up!
Mary:p
Stevec Comment by: Stevec - 2007-09-14 16:57
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I like how the first story mixes the imagery between some sort of royal procession and the execution.

As for the second? Dude! Half-life kicks Halo's a$$.
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