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Back-street Nosedive
Humid heat
makes a malodorous cauldron
of the city.
Window open – no air-con
in this hotel. Twenty quid a night,
room with a view: a brick wall
I could reach out and touch.
Mattress stained with the scent
of other people’s sex,
walls yellowed with fag stink.
Air freshener hangs
stale in dirty curtains.
A steady drip… drip…
from broken guttering to a pool
of cheap disinfectant.
Barely a disguise
for blocked drains’ effluvium.
Skinny cats fight all night
over bins’ rancid feast.
I can’t stay here.
I’ll go out, get stinking drunk,
lose myself.
Back-street bars
suck in, belch out,
breathing pungent clientele
like great rotten-toothed beasts.
Scruff walks by, pushes into me
to prove lack of fear or feel skin on skin –
this proximity makes me sick.
He stinks of reefer and cider.
I descend into a club called Miasma.
Bouncers Stale Beer,
Fag Smoke and Vomit
step up to greet me.
Fetid Sweat discos on the dance-floor.
Floating in a whisky cloud,
the city seems aromatic
compared with my thoughts.
Time disappears
into smoke-machine oceans,
shot-through with flashing lights.
My senses dissolve
in electronic vibrations.
Room Spin.
Kicked out of Miasma
for adding to the puke,
I stagger through dawn streets,
greasy spoons waking up
to the smell of all day breakfast.
Suit walks by, crosses over to avoid
the reeking, spew-streaked mess that is me –
this solitude makes me sick.
He smells of expensive aftershave.
Can’t find my hotel.
Try to find someone to ask.
This city doesn’t give a toss.
Just keeps on simmering.
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Comment by: Dante - 2008-05-17 16:39
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I really enjoyed the dark style in which this poem was written. I've never been to Europe, but have been told that public drunkenness was taboo in many places. If that's the truth, it makes the piece all the more enjoyable. I love a good "fuck the world" poem.
My only negative crit is that you use the word "fag" twice. That made me regress to the first time you used it, slightly hindering the flow.
Thanks for a great read, Dante. |
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| Quite the harsh tribute to bad kharma. Good imagery tho a bit too vitriol. Tho something might be lost in translation w/ terms like "fag stink" LOl. |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2008-04-17 05:37
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Cheryl, this is good. You’ve painted a scene for the imagination that I could walk through. Club called “Miasma”. . .walls yellowed with fag stink. . .fag smoke and vomit – amazing imagery! “kicked out of Miasma/for adding to the puke” Bravo! A winner!
This reminds me of Raymond Chandler’s detective stories. There’s not a word wasted.
I really, truly loved this. |
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| I can honestly say, "I've never had the pleasure. Thank God." Sounds very unalluring to me, but your piece is well writen. Thanks for sharing. Janet |
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| That was a great read, you are truly an intelligent writer. I dig the style very much. |
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