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MaggieMay
Maggie May Schill
United States, FL, Jacksonville

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Atop The World

He is,
The only warmth by the shore.
Ardent is his laughter.
Fervent is his fire.

He is,
Sitting atop the world today,
Binding his desire.

He is,
Building a wall today.
In one hand: sand.
The other: mortar.

He is,
Sitting atop the world today,
Waiting for my faith to falter

He is,
Stacking his insecurity.
Where one brick ends,
The other does start.

He is,
Sitting atop of the world today,
With a barrier around his heart.

He is,
Climbing up his pile.
The one he set up
To lock me out.

He is,
Sitting atop the world today,
After scaling his own doubt.

He is,
Gazing with arrogant eyes,
Against the firmament,
At the peak of his wall.

He is,
Sitting atop the world today,
Getting ready to fall.

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mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-11-06 02:02
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"He is,
Sitting atop the world today,"
- set up very well for the character you create. Reads to me as if defiant.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2007-09-14 15:12
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Wow. What a range of emotions. It's like riding waves in a current. Spectacular, Maggie May. I usually find repetition like that extremely annoying in poetry. For some reason, not this time. There's a flow to it that I find would be missing if it wasn't for it, in fact. If that makes any sense.

Anyway, loved it. Thanks for the wonderful read. It's been a while since I've read your poetry, and I've missed it horribly. You help to bring my faith back in poems - in more ways than one.

Teri xo
denisedee Comment by: denisedee - 2007-09-14 14:02
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That is so very beautiful Maggie. I like the repetition and the building and circling. Lovely.
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