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Comment by: - 2006-10-04 19:54
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impact! i think this potrays more of looking in the past and blinded of the futor.
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driving down a narrow and wooded
back road with no lights
this part is the part where you are going forward but it's dark and you can't see and it's blinding.
of any kind looking in the rearview mirror.
this part is the past part were you can't see your future but you are looking to see if your past is catching up to you.
anyhow : very good poem. emotional.
and that's just what i think! |
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| This is cool. I've been there. Good job of capturing a moment filled with frustration. |
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| I would say nought to sixty, to avoid repetition of 'zero'. Also, I'm not sure of your use of the word 'looking'. Might 'reflected' suit instead? Great definition of a life though, a good example of power in brevity. |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-23 13:42
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| I really loved this. Had to read it a few times for what you wrote to sink in. Amusing and disturbing at the same time. |
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| I thank you all for your comments. |
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