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Before Your Time
Many generations of the Hollister family pause together near the theme park's carousel under the shade of a giant oak.
'In the day we sweat it out in the streets of a runaway American dream...'
'Who sings this?' asks little Billy.
'It's The Boss,' says William Sr. 'It's before your time.'
Next,
'Ridin' around in my automobile
My baby beside me at the wheel...'
'Who's this dad?'
'I'm not sure.'
'It's Chuck Berry' says William's father James. 'It's before his time.'
Then,
'Oh hot diggity dog ziggity boom what you do to me...'
'Who's this Grandpa?'
'This is by Oscar Meyer...' starts Grandpa James.
'It's Perry Como,' interrupts William's mother Gertrude 'It's before Grandpa James's time.'
Lastly,
'Yankee Doodle went to town...'
And under the shade of the giant oak tree, the Hollister family sat and listened.
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Comment by: waxseal Online- 2007-09-21 14:13
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| I really liked this one a lot - I had a perfect sense of who all your characters were and I really like the family dynamic that you created. It was such a nice read! |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2007-09-20 16:22
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James, this is really great nostaglia. I was thrown off by the question marks, and had to read this several times to appreciate fully this lovely opus. Consider removal of some of them, e.g., 'In the day we sweat it out in the streets of a runaway American dream...'? Omit the question mark, because a question is not being asked here, it's being asked in the next line.
'who sings this?'? asked little Billy. Omit the second question mark.
In The Boss line, omit both question marks, and so forth.
I love that Oscar Meyer line - perfect! |
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Comment by: mynamelez Online- 2007-09-18 22:40
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I suppose each generation has its own songs that it listens to. I thought that you could have somehow included a modern day rap song for the past generations to ask Billy about (just a suggestion) then they would all have a time.
Good wee story. |
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James, what a great, nostalgic, fall-down-funny story! Thanks for sharing it.
It makes me miss my Grandmas who've both passed away...my mom...snif.
Gotta go give my dad a call.
Loved it, James.
Blessings |
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Comment by: Arley - 2007-09-18 05:35
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| Papa loves mambo . . . mama loves mambo . . . Oh, sorry, got carried away with Como. Reeeeeaaaaal good! |
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