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Have You Ever...
Have You Ever...
Said Something....
Done Something....
Embarrassed The HELL Out Of Yourself?
Have You Ever...
Felt Insecure....
So Ashamed....
Of The Actions That You've Made?
Have You Ever...
Lost Yourself....
All Alone....
Searching For Answers You Could Not Find?
Have You Ever...
Liked Someone....
Loved Someone....
That Didn't Feel The Same?
Have You Ever...
Fooled Around....
Messed Around....
To Warm The Coldness Of A Broken Heart?
Have You Ever...
Turned Your Back....
Walked Away....
From A Friend Who Was In Need?
Have You Ever...
Drowned Yourself....
Sniffed Yourself....
Into A Numbness That Never Lasted?
Have You Ever...
Looked In The Mirror....
Stared At Yourself....
And Had To Look Away?
Have You Ever...
Said "Nothing's Wrong"....
"I'm Just Fine"....
Then Popped A Pill So You Felt Good?
Have You Ever...
Pretended To....
Acted Like....
Someone You Really Weren't?
So Tell Me, HAVE YOU EVER...?
Of Course You Have....
I Know You Have....
An The Truth Is, So Have I
Don't Say You Fuckin Never!!!!
Honestly, I Can Say, I Have Not Done All Of This But The Reality Is. We Have All Done Some Of It. No One is Perfect. It's O.K.
Written By: Jenni-Leigh O'Leary
Copyright Jenni-Leigh O'Leary 2007
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Comment by: Apollo - 2008-01-08 02:55
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Have I ever? Only once... Alright I'm just kidding, the rhetorical question is a good poetic device, just be careful of repetition. I felt like you were pushing the envelope... don't get me wrong, I loved this poem. I'm just saying that the rhetorical question has a more severe impact if it is used more sparingly and comes in at a crucial moment. Just a thought.
"Of Course You Have....
I Know You Have....
An The Truth Is, So Have I
Don't Say You Fuckin Never!!!!"
that was my favorite part... I can feel you're vindication. |
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Comment by: SacredV - 2007-11-21 20:51
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Thanks Vampirina for your honesty...but to share the same honesty this poem is not meant to be anything then a vocal expression of some emotions I was feeling at the time. When Writing, self-expression is most important and therapuic. Not all poetry has to be conveyed in a structured or profound way. A true writer knows this and also understands that writing is therapy and there are no "specs" in therapy.
_JLO |
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| This reads like one of those questionnaires you get on myspace. There is nothing here to engage the reader, just a series of rhetorical questions and answers leading to yet another conclusion on how to love yourself. Think about showing not telling, paint a pretty picture. Anything. But please don't do the same as what 99.9% of would-be poets have done (and are doing, I should add) |
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Comment by: mafsa - 2007-09-27 05:00
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great choice of words to express angst - a powerful emotion conveyed. thanks for the cool read.
Mary:p |
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Comment by: Basil - 2007-09-19 10:38
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Absolutly great,...
You put together in words our biggest secrets,..things we don't like about us,..but never say,..or even try to hide for ourselves,...
And "yes",..most of them,..I recognize,..and that is the beauty of your work,..at the end,..when we are able to be honest to ourselves,..we will all do,...
Keep this up,..I love it |
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