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Nicholas ( a mirror image poem)
Your eyelashes sweep
Like butterfly wings across my cheek.
Our heads so close together,
I smell your baby scent.
Only a few hours old, yet you are the whole world to me.
I smell your baby scent,
Our heads so close together.
Like butterfly wings across my cheek,
Your eyelashes sweep.
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| Thanks to all for the comments, much appreciated |
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| This is so warming in feel and I love the way you have used mirror form it works to great effect, thank you x |
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| Love the structure you have created for this. I'm a big fan of repeated lines...sort of like rhyme only on the grand scale. Nice piece. |
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| Thanks Basil, it wasn't hard to remember the emotion even though it happened almost 17 years ago now! Some things just stay with your forever don't they? |
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Comment by: Basil - 2007-09-21 11:05
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Ow Amanda,...this brings back memories to me,...the first moments my Princess lay on my chest,..so small,..so vunerable,..so perfect.
Thanks for bringing the emotion back,..so to comment your poem,...PERFECT,... |
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