writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
RedeMoon
Ashley Red
United States, CA, San Diego

Words: 700
Access: Public
Comments: 6

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Red Ephemeral Moon Prologue

Naturally, Man, in common with other carnivores is motivated by an impulse to kill, and has a love of destroying life. This tendency is generally subtle, however this impulse of death and destruction exists in the young and the old, in the savage and the refined, the knowledgeable and the ignorant, in those who have never had the opportunity of gratifying it, and those who gratify it regularly. In spite of morality, religion, or laws, it can only depend on justifiable causes. This taste for blood can also coexist with more civilized feelings but this tendency exists in different degrees.
In some it is simply a manifestation of indifference to suffering, in others it appears as obvious pleasure in seeing killings, and in others again the dominance of an irresistible desire to torture and destroy. Bloody tyrants like Nero and Caligula, Alexander Borgia, Louis the XI of France, and Robespierre, whose highest enjoyment consisted in witnessing the agonies of their fellow-men. They were also full of delicate sensibilities and great refinement of taste and manner.
The cases in which bloodthirstiness and cannibalism are united with insanity are those which properly fall under the category of Lycanthropy. Lycanthropy is a disordered condition of the mind or body that may produce hallucinations in a form of Lycan like characteristics depending on the individual and instincts of that individual.
From THE BOOK OF WERE-WOLVES by SABINE BARING-GOULD
Smith, Elder & Co., London
1865

If only it could be condensed so cleanly in a neat package of clever and sophisticated diction by an expert hypothesis, it cannot. This is a story of profound relationships, falling in love, and struggling through life with plenty of blood and hate that all revolve around the moon…a new moon.
I know why that cold beautiful deadly moon hovers persistently, fifty years ago that red moon signaled the change of our world, I was there when the crimson light engulfed our world and challenged the daylight with the pure rage that pours down from the that blood light.
My name…Dominic Otagi…and I know why the red moon glows…


Red Ephemeral Moon
VOLUME ONE
AB INITIO ABSTRUSE – The Beginning of Confusion


CHAPTER ONE CASUISTRY

“Good night darling, I love you,” A young mother tucks in her child, a small girl with long wavy black hair, bright auburn eyes and honey brown skin. Her countenance is that of Cherokee descent.

“Good night Mommy, I love you too,” a gentle kiss is lain on her cheek then the mother walks toward the door but the sound of a whimper halts her footsteps.

“Mommy?” as the young girl cowers under her sunflower yellow blanket.

“Oh, sorry darling I forgot…” she smiles apologetically as the switch to a soft white night light echoes with a reassuring click that calms the child instantly.

“Good Night Adelia,” As she leaves the room Adelia lies in bed for a moment her eyes fluttering and finally shut.

Moments later there comes a sound distant at first…scratching…ever so gently over the whisper of the wind…click…however this is not the reassuring sound of a night light switch but rather a lock coming undone. The shifting of the sliding window pane and the stealthy footsteps that follow creep toward Adelia’s bed all the while light long deep breaths are disguised by the wind. Tacitly, the light sound of clacking claws on hard wood floors permeates the air flowing from wall to wall. Adelia stirs in her sleep breathing out a soft sigh until suddenly a large animalistic jaw comes down on her thin neck snapping it in half and rending the flesh from her throat. Her young blood gushes from the wound and covers the jaw line of the savage beast that tears away the bloody sheets to consume her tender flesh. The wet gnashing, tearing of her flesh and the deep gulping that follows after fills my ears. I can only see the outline of the beast as the form is illuminated by the night light. That once comforting light turned grotesquely incandescent as the blood pools beneath her body. That light that burns my eyes and strains my sanity…that damn light…

Want to comment on this Short Stories?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Short Stories and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
aviva Comment by: aviva - 2007-10-18 10:53
Add to Readers
      
WOW... u instantly captured me... i have three other programs running but i cudnt let go until i had completed the story.
about quietly ricocheting.... i disagree with the prvious comment... its not about being grammatically correct or anything... its like the silence has its own language. at least thats how i read it. gr8 work.
peterhattingh Comment by: peterhattingh - 2007-10-08 02:43
Add to Readers
      
This is powerful. I was drawn in straight away. It led me down many troubled paths of my own youth. The ending was also a gut wrenching drop. Just as I was beginning to feel calm and safer within the experience, you dropped the floor from underneath me. Making me realise that some of these experiences that I wrestle with will be a lifelong journey.

I love reading your work. Seldom am I drawn into my own self, as well as another’s through their work. Well done!

Just a quick note, the grammar needs some smoothing over. I think this will make it more fluid and powerful. (I don’t really have room to comment here though; my grammar is not the finest either).

Looking forward to reading more!

Peter
Kerosene Comment by: Kerosene - 2007-09-25 11:30
Add to Readers
      
Suggestions:

"If only it could be condensed so cleanly in a neat package of clever and sophisticated diction by an expert hypothesis (but) it cannot." - you should drop the "but" here and put a comma after "hypothesis".

"quietly ricochets from wall to wall." - quietly richochets? I suppose it could work, but whenever something richochets, it's from a violent shot of something. So in this case, I think it reads oddly and not protraying what you want it to.

The Point of View seems to change at the end.


Some tweaking and this will be really good. It draws the reader in right away.

john
RedeMoon Comment by: RedeMoon - 2007-09-25 10:37
Add to Readers
      
thanks for your input I will be posting the second part of this chapter sometime this week and I will also be checking out your writings as well

thanks again
Pinky Comment by: Pinky - 2007-09-25 09:58
Add to Readers
      
Love the descriptions, very realistic in thats sense. I would much like to read the rest of the chapter.
1 2 Next

Sponsored Ads


By RedeMoon

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S