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Terror castle
TERROR CASTLE
Jacqueline heard the music, while sitting on her windowsill.
She grabbed her purse and went with will.
To the fair she did go.
Walking round to and fro.
Looking for a ride that was open.
And then, as if the words were spoken.
The Terror Castle was before her eyes.
What a challenge, what a surprise.
'I'll go in,' she bravely said.
But she did not know she would end up dead.
She didn't see the trapdoor below.
She started to fall, but fell so slow.
And when she awoke from her daze.
Five staring, green faces, she wasn't amazed.
'Just another trick,' she boldly said.
But then she noticed they weren't just heads.
They had arm and legs as well.
Then her fear began to swell.
They reached to her with open arms.
Chanting her name as if singing a psalm.
Jacqueline was never heard of again.
Her fate was sealed in a black cold den.
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Comment by: willis - 2006-05-12 10:06
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| i took your advise to read this poem sorry. Not a fairytale the children! even i got scared Lol it was entertaining {sematics scamatics,semantics its all double dutch to me! if it feels right then share it. |
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| Pretty cool. It reads like a fairy tale gone completely wrong. Interesting take, just don't show it to kids! |
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| Thank Greg for me, but I think he must have been looking at the wrong picture. lol I'm fattered you have read most of my pieces. Thanks for the comments. I hope to read more of your work soon. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-03 06:02
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Even though it's dark, I think that this is a cute piece Karina! But that's my twisted mind perhaps. Furthermore, I can picture it as a little chant. A chant that some little girls sing, on a playground, as they're jumping rope, watching me walk by.
Now I'm getting goosebumps. That'd creep me out. Your writing is awesome. Congrats on your book. I'll buy a copy when I get the extra cash.
Oh yea, my best friend, Greg, said: "She's hot!"
And I said, "She can write!"
Great job again. You're writing never lets me down. Best. Lee |
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| Sounds like a story from outer limits. Where the fun house was not really the fun house after all. So the house awaits those who enter next! |
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