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DaveyBoyGreen
David Cromby
United Kingdom, Harold Newman's World, Liverpool

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I Ate Pips of You

I ate pips of you
where they fell
a scrounging dog
in hope they’d grow
through warmer days, less vinegared
less starched I wished
for sandstorms smooth
to smother each’s brittle trepidation
or blow upon
and blunt the knives.

I sharpened mine on yours
and sucked the sand
to globulate small balls
for spitting on your soul
across our sterile no man’s land
this desert rose
uncrossable
and cultivated blind.

You shared your sparks
in trusted palms
in centrifugal eyes
in wondrous heart
with someone else
a shadow crept
just weeks along
replacing mine
that dripped
the echoes of your pips.

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lyrically yours Comment by: lyrically yours - 2007-10-05 09:20
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You shared your sparks
in trusted palms
in centrifugal eyes
in wondrous heart
with someone else

I really like those lines, very good piece, thanks for sharing
niceandy Comment by: niceandy - 2007-09-27 08:07
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Really good turn of phrase; some nice grisly unusual imagery - that title hooks you in. Head turning.
TequilaTwilight Comment by: TequilaTwilight - 2007-09-27 05:12
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"less vinegared
less starched I wished
for sandstorms smooth" - crackin phrasing there!

"to globulate small balls
for spitting on your soul
across our sterile no man’s land" - you have some really visceral images mate.

and brilliant last verse.

tah for sharin hun!
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