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ladytwigliot
Theresa Duddy
United States, California, Fresno

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A Question of Belief

My sister spoke of demons
Who used to tear at her while she slept.
Creatures who filled her head with lies.
Voices who screamed.

Leaving now frail corpse
With a sneer of hatred,
So deep, mortician's wax
Could never repair.

Face contorted,
Clawing reason from my mind,
Feeling every hair stand on end,
Body thrown about the room.

Had Darkness completely
Enveloped her soul,
Wholly cut her off from Light,
To devour the sick and wounded?

Darling child with pale blue lips,
Explain how the crucifix
Burned your delicately soft hands.

Unearthly cold,
Shake free from me,
Release your grip upon my entrails,
Drumming heartbeat within my ears.
Blood stained blonde hair,
Spattered brown upon the wall.

Sickening smell,
Mixture of bile and evil,
Lodged firm within my lungs,
Purging from me distracting thoughts.

Within warped hands a final note,
'Dear World,
Dear Mom, I'm sorry,
It hurts; I'm scared.
Today they told me
They wanted my soul.
I'm bleeding, I'm sor-'

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ally19ky Comment by: ally19ky - 2007-02-13 14:46
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Very darkly intriguing. absolutely dramatically, terrifyingly, beautiful. you are so much better than the poetry I have to read in class!
rich1982 Comment by: rich1982 - 2006-05-10 17:59
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Whoa very intense; I like! I especially liked, "Darling child with pale blue lips,/Explain how the crucifix/Burned your delicately soft hands." That's so well written! Really fluid and dark and sumptuous! I shall have to read this again when I'm more awake. I think you might like to read my poem, "The Last of the Puppets"... Cor, some of this poem seems too much in places! Very strong work.
Daniella13 Comment by: Daniella13 - 2006-04-15 18:48
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A dark, pretty poem. I really liked this one but I feel the last stanza shifts abruptly to a different place and seems to weaken the rest of the poem. Maybe it's all the punctuation. Then again, I'm a minimalist.
redbirdjazzz Comment by: redbirdjazzz - 2006-04-01 17:00
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This is very powerful and disturbing. Absolutely terrifying imagery, perfectly placed throughout. I love the ending, and I don't think you could have concluded this in a more moving way. Wow!
SFNovelwriter Comment by: SFNovelwriter - 2006-03-28 13:23
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A tortured mind a tortured soul and a final end every parent hopes not to see. Very dark and haunting stuff, gave me the chills.
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