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Chowrunnergo
Les Hernandez
United States, CO, Colorado Springs

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Backing Out

My lifelong dream spreads out before me, African savannah broken up here and there by giraffe-ravaged trees. The curious cackle of nearby hyenas disturbs the tranquility.

For years I’d professed a desire to die by way of lion. Perhaps watching the Lion King daily as a child planted the seeds that would evolve into an honest wish to become part of the circle of life. When I knew my time was coming, I often said, I would voyage to Africa to fall where man first stood. A week prior to today, I sensed death’s icy breath at my neck.

And here I stand, broken by time,  a little prune of a man. The bat that was supposed to be a weapon has become my staff. I suppose everything has come together as I wanted, but still…

Why am I here? I still have some life left in me. And, why am I naked? I can feel the yellow eyes of predators sizing me up. The bat might as well be a water balloon. I’m having serious regrets now.

It sure is beautiful here. I wonder if I can still climb a tree.


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Comment by: - 2007-10-08 12:03
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I love the doubt addressed with wit.

I've always thought this is a more natural way of things. To give the remains of the human body to the animals that they might prosper simply makes sense to me.

But the giving up of live - that one I woulda had as much trouble with as that poor fella.

Very enjoyable piece.
JenJunky Comment by: JenJunky - 2007-10-08 04:10
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Happy trails to the lion's den. hehe Nice story. Thanks for the read.

Verdi
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2007-10-07 13:20
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Really? Would you really want to be eaten by a lion? Thinking about it - it's actually quite practical. They're reconsidering the length of time a family can own graves here in GB.

Here even giraffe; which i thought were gentle beasts, are hostile - "giraffe-ravaged "

Loved your depiction of the old man - "a little prune of a man"
karjon Comment by: karjon Online- 2007-10-07 12:07
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A noble dream of a noble death, but it became a nightmare scenario.

Cracking last line - really made me smile.

Thanks for taking the challenge, Les - I've enjoyed both your stories.

Cheers

Karen
Chowrunnergo Comment by: Chowrunnergo - 2007-10-06 19:53
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Sadly, this is an actual desire of mine. When future grandchildren of mine ask how I died they can proudly say....fighting a lion.
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