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Insane (as edited by Ron H.)
The issues are unclear
i end up in rage,
My heart is heavy
i'm trapped in a cage,
My spirit is downtrodden
I need minimum wage,
At war with everything
I'm in need of change.
Understanding is childish
am I underaged?
On and on not knowing what's next
is making me crazy,
My life, I put it all out...
...all out on a page
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| thank you lucy, i'm happy you love my work. |
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| thanks Aqueousillusion for the comment, but i'd appreciate some criticizm from time to time. i'm glad you like it thogh. |
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| The rhyme in this piece works well. Nice flow as well. Keep it up! |
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Comment by: lucy - 2007-10-10 07:09
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Great flow until the second to last stanza, then I am tripped up.
Lots of energy. Lots of info. Nice share. :) |
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