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Whispered Words
Karen Koski
Canada, Ontario

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The dance

They dance,
like lithe silouettes upon the cavern wall
cold and disfigured and yet,
there is a heat within that pulsates with each curve.
The heart wanders lonely in this distant land of love
though I reach to where I cannot see,
the ground beneath me crumbles as I fall
into cold waters of disdain
and yet
the distant shores fill with hope abound
and covet the longing in my soul
for one, and one alone.
A destiny of shadows,
of love lost
with a dream of being rekindled
beyond heaven's doors.
They dance,
weaving a spell of magic that encapsulates all
floating earnestly
toward that door that stands ajar
offering a glimpse of me
from within
As I cry
yearning with a passion
lust
hunger
and love
I am not so cold as they believe.

*new - 2/01/05

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wildfeistykitten Comment by: wildfeistykitten - 2007-10-12 11:10
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I truly enjoyed the raw emotion you portrayed in this piece.
PhoenixTPA Comment by: PhoenixTPA - 2007-06-03 06:15
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What a beautiful, powerful piece. Thank you for an excellent read.

D.K.
Robin Marie Comment by: Robin Marie - 2007-02-07 21:16
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Wow. This poem is amazing. It's just beautiful.
Comment by: - 2006-03-16 11:26
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I think this is excellent though I do have a trouble figuring it all out, maybe lost love. I do have a few suggestions in the line you write (offering a glimpse of me) Maybe change the me to offering a glimpse of myself Then you write (I am not so cold as they believe) Maybe try I am not so cold as belived. Other then that great stuff I enjoyed it.
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-03-15 11:40
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Well written. Some of the description is a little forced.

"weaving a spell of magic that encapsulates all
floating earnestly
toward that door that stands ajar"

That is very well written. And your meter is dead on steady.. so excellent!
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