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Back on the Right Track Wee Challenge #15
The Pope is Dead
The doctor acted quickly. He read the pontiff's heart beat, brain waves and respiratory signals; no visible signs of life. He turned to the the Cardinal Carmelengo and whispered to him in his ear, 'The pope is dead.'
The Cardinal Carmelengo stepped forward with a silver mallet in his hand and tapped the pope's forehead three times. No response. He turned to the audience of cardinals and announced, 'The See of Peter is vacant.' He paused and made the sign of the cross over the dead man. Turning to face the solemn priests, he said, 'I will inform the Cardinal Vicar of Rome. He will tell the People with confidence and decorum. Shortly, I will call the heads of the three orders of cardinals to a meeting to discuss preparations for his burial. As from this moment, the pontiff's quarters are out of bounds to everyone until after the election of a new pope. I will begin preparations for the conclave to put the People back on the right track.'
The Cardinal Carmelengo retreated without turning his back. The gawking priests followed his lead out of the room. The huge, ornate doors banged shut.
The lonely man was no more.
200 words
Notes:
No twist in this one: Just the proceedings after a pope dies. Informative I hope.
Taken from my novel Saintly Powers, about the canonisation of the Blessed Cardinal John Henry Newman.
People is deliberately spelled with a cap P to signify all Catholics on earth).
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| Fascinating and richly written. I liked the same line Karen likes... I must be getting smarter every day. |
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Comment by: dlynn - 2007-10-16 11:02
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Louis,
This was a good story, and informative as well.
I like how you closed the story with "The lonely man
is no more."
I am not Catholic, so I was unfamiliar with the
proceedings upon the pope's demise.
You have again, written a very good story.
: )
Diane |
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simply excellent LJ... as usual
Thanks for providing a window to a world that is totally foreign to me.
Julia |
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Comment by: karjon - 2007-10-15 17:56
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'The lonely man was no more.'
Excellent line, LJ.
As a lapsed Catholic, I did know the ritual, but that last line made it a more personal experience.
Well writen, as always, and definitely informative to those who don't know the ritual, but, as with almost all religious rites, still very odd.
Cheers
Karen |
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Di-Agnostic Ash?
LJ, I have read of this ceremony before and you have written a solemn and respectful description of the detailled ritual.
I think the author, Dan Brown uses similar descriptions and details in his 'Angels and Demons' book, which, soon - as a film, will bring RC ritual to the mainstream of non RCs - but not necessarily in a good way.
I like to see both sides of stories and feel that the People need certain rituals for their vision of their churches, but there are times when Religion falls foul of its aims. Sometimes it's the individuals, sometimes the insitutions. I wish that all could agree on a peaceful dogma and end the religious wars.
Sorry, just a few thoughts
Thank you for the well written words, LJ
Pacifist Grae (son of a Catholic mother, husband of a Catholic wife). |
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