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Under No Circumstances
They were expecting her to get out of that toilet. Another blond wearing sunglasses went inside the same changing room. The kidnappers left in a car with both the blond and the millionaire. They took the two inside a building and tied them.
'Now we call her husband demanding the ransom.' They left the building. The blond took the knife hidden inside her sleeve.
'It’s OK. I am a police officer.'
The millionaire kissed the cop copiously. She'd filed for divorce and married the policeman, who was disguised as woman.
'Under no circumstances my ex would pay me anything.'
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Comment by: karjon - 2007-10-29 01:34
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Hi Ana
A big story for such a small word count - possibly too big as it includes a fairly lengthy passage of time that has to be glossed over (or at least, I assume it does - escape, divorce, re-marriage etc.).
Thanks for theread and for taking the challenge.
Cheers
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Comment by: Thula7 - 2007-10-24 10:38
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| Wow, what a twist. I didn't see the millionare as a woman right away, but got it at the end (lesbian flash, ooh.) On my second read, it came out right away. Good job on the flash piece. I like it. |
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Nice plot and perfect word limit. Good job.
john |
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| LOL... The last line rings so true. Thanks for sharing. |
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