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dammonjay
Yusuf Dimas
Nigeria, Niger State, Minna

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as Life Presents

she was full of strength and valor
living life to the fullest
with no regrets till now

a moment of pleasure stole her splendor
and painted her with guilt and shame
her present condition has made her vulnerable
making it tough for her to handle the squable

what has she done?
a question she has to answer
a prominent part of her body is enlarging
growing in size as the days go passing

she's just sixteen and completely unprepared
to make a decision to suit her demise
her partner of pleasure has denied responsibility
he's only eighteen and must save life's tranquility


either to keep it or kill it
she can hardly decide
her parents are blowing the issue out of proportion
making her choice to lean towards the later option


she's torn between two choices...
(to be continued)

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dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-10-24 02:32
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elizabetholloway , thank you so much, i'm happy you like a part of this piece
dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-10-24 02:29
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than you lucy, i'm glad you think ths piece is beautiful. i'll definitely work on the wordings of those stanzas.
lucy Comment by: lucy - 2007-10-23 16:08
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Beautiful, until the last two stanzas in the last paragraph, then I was stopped in the flow.
The wording needs to be changed for the flow. :)

But, otherwise, I am waiting for the rest of the story....
Comment by: - 2007-10-23 13:34
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"a moment of pleasure stole her splendor
and painted her with guilt and shame
her present condition has made her vulnerable
making it tough for her to handle the squable"
This is one of the best lines I've read on this site.
dammonjay Comment by: dammonjay - 2007-10-23 05:02
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i'll appreciate scrutiny from you and a sudgestion for a title and genre for this piece from you all. thank you
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